Pictures in the Mind

I have been practising using words in my writing that give readers pictures in their minds.

On the 14th of November, my whole school was excited about Athletics Day because we got to do discus. We got to do vortex. We got to do high jump.We got to do long jump and running and we got to compete against each other.
In high jump, I ran as fast as a car up to the black and orange bar and jumped and did a scissor-kick over the bar and on a big green mat.
A lot of people didn’t make it because they didn’t jump high enough and they hit the bar and, finally, there were three people. Josh, Moses and me, and the first one who hit the bar was Moses and then Josh hit the bar and that means I won.